Major Arcanum No. Below Zero - The About To Blow
Before mornings creep down the wideways of woodland haltthe breathed haircurls aflame he came where she was wide in the wantingand illustry and filled with bursts and offered more mothering wasnot...
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Done and dusted. I must say you seem rather on the case with this issue. Have you had many people not reciprocating? I suspect an issue for new posters may be that it takes a little time to look...
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P.S. Altered the title to give a clearer indication of what this poem is about.
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Hi, Steve, and welcome!Yes, we've had a few in the past that do the old post and run trick, to the point where we've felt the need to post a gentle reminder! We've also had the issue where people have...
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Welcome, Steve Thanks for all your crits of various poems in this forum. I can see you have gone above and beyond the call of duty and it's good to see a new face. Well, if I'm way off base then at...
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Thanks for that, Daniel. There is a kind of sexual imagery here, but it is not the primary focus of the poem. The major clue is in the title, and a major arcanum is a Tarot trump card. In this case...
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Hi, Soulsease, yeah, I thought I should get some in the bank, as it's probably the best way of acquainting yourself with a site and its poets. I know a bit more about who's here now.Steve.
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Steve, I'm not surprised that this isn't about what I thought it might have been about. From reading your critiques to others (who are conspicuous by their absence) I knew there was a method to the...
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Hi, Daniel. Thanks for that. Your response is as valuable to me as anyone else's. I post on several poetry boards to get as wide a range of responses as possible, and I wanted to see how this one...
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Not to be "conspicuous by my absence" (outside of the absence necessitated by real life demands and a simple lack of time!), I'm sure we can all agree that not everyone will have input on every...
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Hi, JaML, many thanks for the reads. Sorry it left you critless on this occasion, but I agree - no sense making it up. I certainly don't comment on everything I read either. It's already getting...
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Steve...just to let you know, the Major Arcanum reference in the title is clear (to me, anyway...I used to have a couple of packs of Tarot back in my Student days, including a set of Crowley cards...
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Hi, soulsease, thanks for taking the time. Major Arcana are also called (incorrectly) trumps - they include the Fool, Death, the Hanged Man etc. The singular is arcanum.I had to minimise the...
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Hi SteveI know very little about tarot cards.First Im going to be boring and repeat what others have said, but I do find the lack of punctuation off putting not showing where I should stop for...
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Many thanks for the read, Snow. There are no actual typos or 'errors' as such, but there are a lot of deliberate reworkings of words and phrases to suggest effects rather than straight meanings - if...
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Steve, here you be ... and with such an intriguing and fresh poem as first offering! The voice is yours but also seems faintly kissed with an echo of Dylan Thomas, who's probably one of my three...
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Hi, Brenda, good to see you too. I didn't want to wave lest I was cruelly shunned Yes, you're not far off with much of this, and I sensed Dylan Thomas here and there too. I'd make it god with a small...
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Hi Steve, Good to meet you! And welcome to the Maelstrom's White Water's ... There is something about this that is alluring in this... there is surely a sense of underlying sensuality and as Brenda...
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Thanks for the read, Liz. I'm gradually arriving at a revision, but I won't realistically be changing the corrupt ghazal form. It's one of those poems you have to work in the dark with to some extent,...
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Hello Steve, Sorry I didn't notice when critiquing that this was in Ghazel Form. I wouldn't expect anyone to change the form a poem is written in. Thanks for the link to your blog. I found it...
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